The New Poem

Posted by: Aarju Pandey

I chose not to rhyme because it is not neccassary to rhyme in today’s poem culture. It is considered a somewhat immature to rhyme in poetry.

A rhymed poem for all the folks who wanted it

A cat chased a rat

The rat had a bat

The rat hit the cat

In the head with a bat

The cat had a bruise

At night he could not snooze

He turned out the fuse

No, No snooze

Now the cat hates the rat

And he hates the bat

The rat loves the bat

That made the cat stop chasing the rat

Now…you decide, which poem is better?

The New Poem was last modified: September 11th, 2013 by Aarju Pandey
 

Blog Comments

  1. Mabi

    Justin,
    Thanks for the poem.

    I saw lots of rhymes in the Williamsons poem. e.g. cascades-braids, pools-rules, spills- rills- sills, place-race.

    I was not very sure about the “meter” so I wrote to him.

    This is what he wrote me back.

    Dear Mabi,

    Where in the world did you find that poem? It is in a pattern of meter and rhyme, but it’s just made up for that occasion. Sounds like you must be a writer, yourself. Anyhow, thanks.

    Greg

    So there are more things in poetry. Your eyes dont see what your brain does not know.
    I see potential in Aarju that she will some day will be writing poems not only with rhymes but also in refrains with lots of alleterations. She will be using some classical meters and will be writing Sonnets and etc.

    Other wise, (as someone commented somewhere here) she can write prose and break down into broken sentences and call it a poem.

    Again, the choice is hers.

    Poetry is more complex than it seems – if you know.
    Try some poems in NewYorker and see if they make sense to you.
    They may look like broken sentences – without rhyme with lots of messages.

  2. Mabi

    Yeap ! There are more poetry written in free verse that do not follow any patterns of “meter” or “rhymes” and use of metronomes become obsolute and so called Iambic and Sonnets become ridiculously hard.

    However, you can take your diction to a different level if you practice some classic methods.

    The choice is yours !

  3. DreamSky

    Ya, semantics are more important than presentation.

    But if one could fetch the freedom of ‘free verse flow’ with a fluently rhymed poem… definitely that would not be an immature form of art.

  4. Justin

    Whether or not poem rhymes does not determine its quality.

    Waterfall

    In still transparency, the water pools
    High in a mountain stream, then spills
    Over the lip and in a sheet cascades
    Across the shoal, obeying hidden rules,
    So that the pleats and braids,
    The feather-stitched white water, little rills
    And divots seem to ride in place
    Above the crevices and sills,
    Although the water runs along the race.

    (cropped for fair use)

    -Greg Williamson, 1994

  5. bishwa

    this is kinda like “Tom and Jerry” ;)

    i won’t say that free verses are not good.. they are better in their own ways.. a poet has to choose his/her own style. but poems that rhyme can be used to express feelings in a melodous way, in a tone that gets stuck to your mind. Anyways, i’m just suggesting.. i love free verses too..

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