The Commuter Rail Sonnet
Wake up everyday before the day dawns
Ride like the wind just to make it on time
Only it’s not some hellcat that I get to ride
It is a filthy green slug trailing on slime
For it’s a long way to where I have to be
My private little prison where I punch in
A diesel goliath I board to take me in
To deliver me to the corporate machine
It is a long, lonely ride and would be painful
If not for two things I have to keep me cool
The first- Led Zeppelin- on my ears to soothe
The other, sweet woman, are thoughts of you
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November 16th, 2008 at 3:47 pm
After a long gap, so anyone replaced the Bhangeri ?
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November 16th, 2008 at 5:31 pm
Well, no, mostly because “bhangeri” is an ideal… like “utopia” or “shangri-la” or “perpetual motion”.
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November 16th, 2008 at 9:44 pm
nice poem!
and yeah, “Led Zeppelin” - definitely is the greatest band ever
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November 17th, 2008 at 4:30 am
Nice work…Keep it up!
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November 17th, 2008 at 4:55 am
Hmm..so bhangeri’s perpetual motion along with you till the eternity.
“I believe that unarmed truth and unconditional love will have the final word in reality”.i think MLK said so,
anyway,following same routine each day is surely boring, unless you have LedZep to soothe your ears.
All of my Love,All of my Love,All of my Love to you
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November 17th, 2008 at 5:04 am
kati bhangeri bhangeri bhanera chichyaeko ho keta ho, angeri chataidiu ki kya ho? laj pacheka thita haru. dhokhe baj ho tyo heretic.
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November 17th, 2008 at 5:11 am
hahaha, charitra hatya jasto sangin Aarrop lagyo ni heretic bro lai ta.
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November 17th, 2008 at 5:21 am
yes yes someone told me so. heretic le ek jana keti lai khub nachayo re bhanera. ahile bhangeri bhangeri bhandai chichyau chha kinabhane tyo keti le heritc lai aru sanga jiskeko dekhera heretc lai chodera arkai snga lagire. aba, too late heretic bro.
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November 17th, 2008 at 5:27 am
la…k sunnu pareko yesto ? tutt, sabb guff keta haruko.
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November 17th, 2008 at 6:04 am
malai ek patak canteen ma chiya khanda heretic le sutukka tyo keti ko bare ma bhanya thyo. tara ma pol kholdina kya. pheri u risauchha.
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November 17th, 2008 at 9:24 am
Yo sab comment hanne ku-bu ra prad ho ki jasto lagcha malai chahin. Not sure who else is involved.
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November 17th, 2008 at 10:52 am
haha… ma chai ma nai ho hain…one of you old blog reader and admirer.
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November 18th, 2008 at 3:15 am
yo sabai commnet lekhne Biswa Hang nai ho. Nam change gardai comment lekhdai gare jasto chha. heretic ko boston tir lav pare jasto chha ni kaso ho?
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November 18th, 2008 at 4:23 pm
Boston hos ya nepal, I’m always in love — I love eeeveryyyone — when I’m “under the influence” that is…hehehe
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November 21st, 2008 at 9:17 am
i liked the way you put ‘diesel goliath’. The content is typical.You have mirrored yourself through this poem.I guess you are a working class hero.A ‘cool’ one.
My personal opinion about writers is that a wrtiter needs to describe a scenario and discover himself there.I guess you described yourself at first and then discovered a scenario.anyways your symbolisms were mindblowing.
You can comment my poem ‘where are we’ in the humour section.
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November 23rd, 2008 at 6:48 pm
Nice going bro! Totally agree with the two most soothing things in everyday life…..Zepp, and thoughts of the one
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December 5th, 2008 at 7:40 am
hello there are you “wtf” what is that.My poem “Where are we” was mistakenly put in the humour section.This is a philosophical one why would I put it into humour section.I have read your new poem.It is good.I will read it again to get it fully.
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