Comments on: The New Poem http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/ Express Yourself Sun, 14 Mar 2010 12:38:03 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.7 hourly 1 By: Mabi http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7917 Mabi Sun, 18 May 2008 11:21:28 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7917 Justin, Thanks for the poem. I saw lots of rhymes in the Williamsons poem. e.g. cascades-braids, pools-rules, spills- rills- sills, place-race. I was not very sure about the "meter" so I wrote to him. This is what he wrote me back. Dear Mabi, Where in the world did you find that poem? It is in a pattern of meter and rhyme, but it’s just made up for that occasion. Sounds like you must be a writer, yourself. Anyhow, thanks. Greg So there are more things in poetry. Your eyes dont see what your brain does not know. I see potential in Aarju that she will some day will be writing poems not only with rhymes but also in refrains with lots of alleterations. She will be using some classical meters and will be writing Sonnets and etc. Other wise, (as someone commented somewhere here) she can write prose and break down into broken sentences and call it a poem. Again, the choice is hers. Poetry is more complex than it seems - if you know. Try some poems in NewYorker and see if they make sense to you. They may look like broken sentences - without rhyme with lots of messages. Justin,
Thanks for the poem.

I saw lots of rhymes in the Williamsons poem. e.g. cascades-braids, pools-rules, spills- rills- sills, place-race.

I was not very sure about the “meter” so I wrote to him.

This is what he wrote me back.

Dear Mabi,

Where in the world did you find that poem? It is in a pattern of meter and rhyme, but it’s just made up for that occasion. Sounds like you must be a writer, yourself. Anyhow, thanks.

Greg

So there are more things in poetry. Your eyes dont see what your brain does not know.
I see potential in Aarju that she will some day will be writing poems not only with rhymes but also in refrains with lots of alleterations. She will be using some classical meters and will be writing Sonnets and etc.

Other wise, (as someone commented somewhere here) she can write prose and break down into broken sentences and call it a poem.

Again, the choice is hers.

Poetry is more complex than it seems - if you know.
Try some poems in NewYorker and see if they make sense to you.
They may look like broken sentences - without rhyme with lots of messages.

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]]> By: Mabi http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7641 Mabi Fri, 02 May 2008 18:51:22 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7641 Yeap ! There are more poetry written in free verse that do not follow any patterns of "meter" or "rhymes" and use of metronomes become obsolute and so called Iambic and Sonnets become ridiculously hard. However, you can take your diction to a different level if you practice some classic methods. The choice is yours ! Yeap ! There are more poetry written in free verse that do not follow any patterns of “meter” or “rhymes” and use of metronomes become obsolute and so called Iambic and Sonnets become ridiculously hard.

However, you can take your diction to a different level if you practice some classic methods.

The choice is yours !

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]]> By: DreamSky http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7638 DreamSky Fri, 02 May 2008 09:29:17 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7638 Ya, semantics are more important than presentation. But if one could fetch the freedom of 'free verse flow' with a fluently rhymed poem... definitely that would not be an immature form of art. Ya, semantics are more important than presentation.

But if one could fetch the freedom of ‘free verse flow’ with a fluently rhymed poem… definitely that would not be an immature form of art.

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]]> By: nepal http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7636 nepal Fri, 02 May 2008 03:08:32 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7636 Feels better if rules are broken... Feels better if rules are broken…

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]]> By: Justin http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7635 Justin Thu, 01 May 2008 14:09:13 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7635 Whether or not poem rhymes does not determine its quality. Waterfall In still transparency, the water pools High in a mountain stream, then spills Over the lip and in a sheet cascades Across the shoal, obeying hidden rules, So that the pleats and braids, The feather-stitched white water, little rills And divots seem to ride in place Above the crevices and sills, Although the water runs along the race. (cropped for fair use) -Greg Williamson, 1994 Whether or not poem rhymes does not determine its quality.

Waterfall

In still transparency, the water pools
High in a mountain stream, then spills
Over the lip and in a sheet cascades
Across the shoal, obeying hidden rules,
So that the pleats and braids,
The feather-stitched white water, little rills
And divots seem to ride in place
Above the crevices and sills,
Although the water runs along the race.

(cropped for fair use)

-Greg Williamson, 1994

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]]> By: bishwa http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7631 bishwa Thu, 01 May 2008 09:41:07 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7631 this is kinda like "Tom and Jerry" ;) ... i won't say that free verses are not good.. they are better in their own ways.. a poet has to choose his/her own style. but poems that rhyme can be used to express feelings in a melodous way, in a tone that gets stuck to your mind. Anyways, i'm just suggesting.. i love free verses too.. this is kinda like “Tom and Jerry” ;) …

i won’t say that free verses are not good.. they are better in their own ways.. a poet has to choose his/her own style. but poems that rhyme can be used to express feelings in a melodous way, in a tone that gets stuck to your mind. Anyways, i’m just suggesting.. i love free verses too..

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]]> By: The New Poem http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7629 The New Poem Thu, 01 May 2008 02:58:11 +0000 http://www.everestuncensored.org/2290/2008/04/30/the-new-poem/#comment-7629 [...] Original post by EverestUncensored [...] [...] Original post by EverestUncensored [...]

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